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He was religion,
she was the world,
it took her a while, 
but she slowly believed.
His verses filled her with a hope, 
beyond her wildest dreams. 

He was love,
She was society.
He seeped in her structures 
built skyscrapers in her skies
and mended the cracks in her fragile bones

He was imagination,
and she was insanity.
together they were the spark
of an idea, that ignited 
a blaze on her mountain peaks 

He was the winter,
and she warmed him up.
She was the summer,
and he was her shade.
They blended together, 
a match set by fate. 

Their path was dark,
so they lit a candle 
and were burned by its flames.
The autumn of their love
turned into falling leaves, 
and she was the victim
of a passion that killed her
in her early years of spring. 
something random

and well...what the hell, every now and then i take a couple poem or story requests. ask me i won't bite, promise. note me and we'll talk. :)

 
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:iconserenesouls27:
Serenesouls27 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I totally :iconmyheartplz: the poem :love:
I think each and every word seems so right !
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you, i am glad you enjoyed it :iconbackhug:
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Serenesouls27 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:) :)
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EricAMBM Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013   Writer
very nice and very good imagery. 
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
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:iconpytryseck:
pytryseck Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
love in full imagination :) brilliant 
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :) :huggle:
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:iconpytryseck:
pytryseck Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
my pleasure Meow :3 
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sciencevsart Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
But earthlier happy is the rose distilled
Than that which withering on the virgin thorn
Grows, lives, and dies in single blessedness.

-A Midsummer's Night's Dream




Lovely poem, indeed. Although the last part was quite sad.
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :aww: :tighthug: and yea i wanted the contrast to happen between the four stanzas and the fifth 
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is lovely, and I particularly like the thinking behind the first four verses.  i'm not sure what happens in the fifth verse that causes them to be "burned." 

I also love "He was religion/and she was the world."  Some people have a lot of trouble with religious imagery, but yours here is spot-on.
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you. in the fifth stanza i wanted to hit a contrast, as burned by its flames refers to a breakup in a relationship and/or pain depends how you'd interpret it.   
this was one of them one time shots, i  tinkered about it for a week or so until i was satisfied with it. i'm glad you've enjoyed reading :aww: :tighthug: 
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for clarifying.  :)
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :huggle:
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writerELEASE Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Student Writer
I really love this. The imagery is so strong and the underlying meaning of this really sinks in deep. It's so original. The combination of nature and religion here is brilliant. Well done, indeed!
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you, was tinkering over this for nearly a week to get it to sound good. so i am glad it did turn out the way it did :tighthug: 
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writerELEASE Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Student Writer
:D
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:iconalekhein:
Alekhein Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Student Writer
That's really pretty.
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
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monkeygothics Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
This, at face value, feels so simplistic, as through the entirety of it is the uncomplicated version of life. However, it also feels painful and sorrowful, yet absolutely sweet and lighthearted simultaneously. Of course, as the reader, my view will never coincide with your intentions, but I must say that it causes serious joy for me to have read this. I really loved it. (:
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
awh thank you and yes i do try to keep m y poetry as simple as possible, i find it closer to the heart that way :aww:
thank you for taking the time to read it that's so sweet of you :tighthug: 
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:iconfallenarchetype:
FallenArchetype Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my jeez this is beautiful
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
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FallenArchetype Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :hug:
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DarkHollowLover1313 Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
T-T Wow I really want to cry now..
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aww don't cry :( it's not that sad...
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't try to really understand because as previously stated, I don't go well with poetry, but I enjoyed the flow of words very much. 
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :) 
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :) 
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:iconbunocerous:
bunocerous Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Makes me think of a summer's day by shakespeare
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you, it's a nice play indeed. 
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:iconemosstink1:
emosstink1 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
its pretty deep!...very beautifully expressed!
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :) 
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Midnightdragonchaser Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
Really beautiful Love 
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :tighthug: 
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:iconjojo22:
jojo22 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Freakin' beautiful my friend :heart:
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart: thank you :tighthug: 
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:iconblacksilhoutte:
BlackSilhoutte Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That was a pleasing poem.. :)
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :tighthug:
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:iconladyofsilver:
LadyOfSilver Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great imagery! You have used a unique way to describe relationships - through opposite things and seasons. I love it. Great job! :clap:
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you, i'm glad you've enjoyed reading it :huggle: 
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iwuvicecream Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice poem! :heart:
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :) 
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iwuvicecream Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Np!! :heart:
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gruuvvi Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Hey thats a really lovely and fine poet! I lovee it :) it is modern and yet not at the same time. Great! :)
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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you i am glad you like it :aww: 
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fugimoto Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013

sounds sad or tragic at the end!

perhaps i just mis interpted; still i like it,

i like how he and she complament each others trates!

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:iconsolidmars:
SolidMars Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
naw the last verse is tragic you didn't misinterpret 
thank you :)
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fugimoto Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013
ooh ok i shall weep bitter tears now, excuss plz :icontearsplz:
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