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I grasp Fate by his throat,
scold him for walking uninvited into my home.
I empty the pockets
of his worn out coat
and the happiness of a city,
scatters across my kitchen's floor.

"Aren't you ashamed?
You steal our dreams,
our long awaited goals,
the hope, the memories,
the fleeting I love you's,
and a newborn's first yawn.
Give it back to the people!
That's not what they had planned at all!"

He's old and weary, yet he smiles,
words form in a soft tone,
a total contrast to my screaming voice.
"Oh, but I am a servant of Time,
I can't bring back what's lost,
some dreams are meant to be stolen,
they're too grand to come true."


He twitches when he sees my gun,
a little revolver I load and aim to my skull.
"My dreams are mine you can't steal them tonight,
I'm not a puppet in your parade,
I'll not be driven by your strings and galore,
It's my life and I choose to defy!"
It doesn't even hurt when my blood spatters to the floor.
fate has his way in screwing us over too hard sometimes. 
this poem is stirred by a convo from earlier this evening. 
simple rhyming scheme in some stanzas

“We dream to give ourselves hope. To stop dreaming - well, that’s like saying you can never change your fate.”
― Amy Tan, The Hundred Secret Senses

“Fate is never fair. You are caught in a current much stronger than you are; struggle against it and you'll drown not just yourself but those who try to save you. Swim with it. and you'll survive”
― Cassandra Clare, City of Ashes


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LonesomeBookworm Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Chills... purely amazing. I had different types of imagery in my head. The old man, but also of a woman, because in Greek, we call Fate a female...
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
a fatal female that is too :) 
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LonesomeBookworm Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:nod:
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heidi137 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful poemHug 
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :huggle:
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heidi137 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's my pleasure.moomin-hug 
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Rosanna24 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I love this. People tell me my poems are good (they aren't) They clearly have not read yours yet. I really love this
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :huggle: and i'm sure your poems are good, we all write in our comfort zone :D 
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Rosanna24 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
No problem. Thank you :huggle:
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :huggle:
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LittleWolf-Dreamer Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh! wow! This is just awesome! :heart:   
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :huggle:
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LittleWolf-Dreamer Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Most welcome Julian. :huggle:
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ReiReiSerenade Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:wow: This is amazing! I'm speechless... Great job! :clap: :heart:
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :tighthug:
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LMW-Creations Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting take over the subject... Lovely time spent reading it. :)
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :huggle:
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is bloody amazing 
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :huggle:
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meanmaco12 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
once again absolutely breath-taking
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :huggle:
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KittySib Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...Amazing, intense and vivid. Good job!:D
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
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ttbloodlusttt Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
I feel the progression is swift and really complements the rhythm of the words.
The mood is well developed and snappy. The effect at the end feels like shock
and I am left with awe for the narrator, of their actions. The essence of Fate
and Time being 'this all-seeing-eye' and 'hand that feeds' really plays into
glaring imagery that feels like there are giants among men. In the last, defiant
stanza the narrator becomes an overbearing nod at what I see as a bottom
line. Death doesn't feel like the point to me, it feels like finality. "This is my
decision. You either accept it or go away. Either way, I will pay you no more
Time and you will have no more say in my Fate."
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SolidMars Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
death is always a shock to anyone especially when it's by choice. perhaps it's a figurative death here though? i mean taking fate into your own hands usually mean a fresh start away from your old life. so maybe it's saying goodbye to the old you and starting from scratch?
i know i did that. 
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ttbloodlusttt Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014
That's basically what I meant. ^_^ :hug:
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